9.14

**Today's Learning**
Students will write with attention paid to
 * using specific details
 * including ample commentary
 * using strong word choice, particularly strong verbs
 * varying sentence patterns, particularly using participial phrases.

Bell Ringer
 * If you have not set-up and/or registered your blog by completing this form, please do so now.
 * If you did not post your sentence last class with a participial phrase do so now.
 * Write one sentence with a participial phrase, describing what the Pioneers will doto the Lions tonight on the football field. Post your sentence in [|the discussion tab.]


 * Update your reading log in Google Docs.

**Assignment:** Final Copy due Monday, September 20 Self-Assessment of First Draft due Thursday, September 16 Peer Revision of Second Draft due Monday, September 20.  
 * Choose one of the connections that you made to the text and video of the Shania Twain song, "Ka-Ching," and draft a response to the song, explaining one of your connections. Your writing should:
 * Be at least 250 words in length.
 * Have a title.
 * Focus on one key connection throughout the entire piece.
 * Include specific details from the text--the song.
 * Explain--thoroughly--the connection you make to those details.
 * Be carefully crafted with attention to
 * strong word choice,
 * a variety of mature sentences (contain at least TWO PARTICIPIAL PHRASES).
 * punctuation and spelling

**Mini Lesson** Learning Goal: Using precise text details and adding thorough explanations
 * 3B: Read "The Paper Bag Princess."
 * [|Making Connections to a Text: A Sample Essay]
 * Notice the Concrete Details from the Text.
 * Notice the Concrete Details from the writer's connection
 * Notice the Commentary (the So What?)
 * Model a Chunk (CD-CM-CM)
 * Access your first draft of the "Ka-Ching" song (check your "Sent Mail" in gmail).
 * Complete the self-reflection form. You can't complete this form until you have a first draft! You must have completed this by the end of next class.
 * Revise your first draft--or if you need to, start fresh. Copy and paste it into Google Docs. The graphic organizer below may help get you started.
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Independent Reading

 * Conferences to re-teach participial phrases